First of all, I would like to compliment the themes you recognized in Austen’s works in this essay. You captured her writing style and stand against societal values during the era she lived in perfectly. Your thesis was strong and persuasive, as was the rest of your essay. You used excellent context support and every paragraph supports your thesis. The language in your essay is extremely eloquent as well. I believe my thesis strongly identifies with yours in terms of how writers sought to fight via their works against the world’s oppression of women. However, I noticed a significant lack of specific literary devices. The themes identified were strong and the quotations you utilized definitely supported your thesis, but I did not see much discussion of how Austen’s specific writing style exemplified these themes through the use of literary devices. For instance, whenever you state that, “Elizabeth’s individual strength is primarily shown through her differences with her family” (Chen 2), you could have stated that Elizabeth’s sister’s act as foil characters to highlight Elizabeth’s individual strength. You could have also mentioned Austen’s powerful diction choices and syntax structure in the following paragraphs.
First of all, I would like to compliment the themes you recognized in Austen’s works in this essay. You captured her writing style and stand against societal values during the era she lived in perfectly. Your thesis was strong and persuasive, as was the rest of your essay. You used excellent context support and every paragraph supports your thesis. The language in your essay is extremely eloquent as well. I believe my thesis strongly identifies with yours in terms of how writers sought to fight via their works against the world’s oppression of women.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I noticed a significant lack of specific literary devices. The themes identified were strong and the quotations you utilized definitely supported your thesis, but I did not see much discussion of how Austen’s specific writing style exemplified these themes through the use of literary devices. For instance, whenever you state that, “Elizabeth’s individual strength is primarily shown through her differences with her family” (Chen 2), you could have stated that Elizabeth’s sister’s act as foil characters to highlight Elizabeth’s individual strength. You could have also mentioned Austen’s powerful diction choices and syntax structure in the following paragraphs.